100 word challenge: Two big spiky balls are taking over the world!

Writing goal: To create a vivid scene.

Two green balls. They are spiky, big and… horrible. They cast shadows over the land. Hundreds of metres tall, they crush cars and flatten buses as they roll down the hill. So far everything we’ve done to try to stop them hasn’t worked… and they are heading towards the nuclear power plant, which will just make them bigger. Soon they will get so big they will crush the earth, and destroy every living thing on it, and therefore causing… the apocalypse. Now I say goodbye, because the two big spiky balls are about to crush meeeee……

3 thoughts on “100 word challenge: Two big spiky balls are taking over the world!

  1. Hello Hamish,

    It seems some horrible spiky invader has threatened the Earth or perhaps some weird mutation has created ever-expanding spiky green balls. You have managed to build suspense as you shared this tale, an unending tale as you suffered the final fate and no one is left to complete the story. Well done.

    I found your use of ellipses (…) interesting. The ellipsis is used to indicate that some text has been omitted from a sentence, to indicate a pause in the sentence, or to represent an idea is trailing off into silence. One hint… there are only three dots in an ellipsis. Again, well done.

    Considering your imagination and developing skills as a writer, I hope you can continue entering the 100WC. Good writers should share their creations.

    Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
    Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia

  2. Hi Hamish!

    What a exciting story. I like your personal writing style, it seems very natural and flowing. You also seem to have a great imagination!

    My one tip would be to remember not to overuse particular devises. For example, in your story you used ellipse (…) which was great for creating suspense in your story, but using them three times could be a little too much! However, many people would say that in writing, rules are made to be broken in order to find new and exciting ways of doing things, so maybe that could be good too!

    Keep on writing!

    Ana, Team 100, Oxford, England

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